PBR In a Pineapple - VHS does country

[vomitHatSteve]

Hey folks! It's been a bit since I've had a new song, but I'm still at it

This was originally written as a straight-ahead parody of country songs about illicit teen partying and people who think you can't get in trouble for drinking in public if you hide the label.
Then my garage rock band played it for a while.
Now it's a Regdar song. But also an excuse to play my new melodica!

Mix 2

PBRInAPineapple2.mp3

Mix 1

PBRInAPineapple1.mp3

Lyrics

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Do you remember those summer days?
We'd load the party in your daddy's Dodge
Riding the gravel, it felt like hours
Everyone's at the old hunting lodge
Riding gravel roads, it felt like hours
All are friends are at the hunting lodge

If they know we're here
They can't do nothing
We don't care if they find out

That we're all getting drunk
But we ain't getting caught
We ain't getting scurvy
Or public intox'
PBR in a pineapple
PBR in a pineapple

We ditched the party ran into the woods
With drinks in hand 'cause we might not return
The days were long; that night was longer still
With you under the stars and much to learn

And we can't drive home
'til the buzz wears off
We might never go home again

PBR! Pineapple! Hit the bar! Keep it full!

but parents are not bound by due process
They took the drinks, the fruit, our keys, and phones
I hope one day that I'll see you again
'til then I'll fill produce with beer alone

[rayc]

My only nit is the phasing of "Everyone's at the old hunting lodge" & the use of THE in particular. The stress isn't rhythmic of on an important word.
IO had to look things up to realize PBR = Pabst Blue Ribbon.
I like it - cool.

[JD01]

Good VHS mix! I don't have much time to listen anymore (I've been both really busy and a bit depressed), but its still really hard to objectively critique your music 'cos its just so weird.

My main criticism is the same as Ray's. You're putting stresses in weird places in words, mainly in the quiet verses, there's a few more, not just the one ray mentioned. You know what it makes it sound like? When someone is trying to do Karaoke of a song they don't know well enough and they're trying to read words that they're not that familiar with while singing the melody.

Once the song gets going into standard VHS territory, its all good though.

I don't know enough about how to properly write out the stress patterns of poetic meter to explain it in words and, I'm sorry, but I just don't have the time these days to quickly do a recording of what I mean.

[vomitHatSteve]

Huh. Interesting observation. I had never even considered that. I'll have to review how I stress things

[vomitHatSteve]

Ok, Mix 2 in the OP.
I've been singing it the original way for so long that changing the lyrics in the first verse actually felt really weird. But you guys are right. The emphasis was on unimportant words. (You're gonna hate my iambic septameter song)

The other major change is that I EQ'd the gang chorus a lot more aggressively so it can both be louder and dominate the rest of the mix less

Unless you guys spot some major issues with it, I'm probably sticking a fork in it now

[CrowsofFritz]

Lol the change from slow to fast gave me a bit of a chuckle. Didn’t sound right hearing you way out of your genre. May seem not weird to someone who doesn’t know who you are.

[vomitHatSteve]

May seem not weird to someone who doesn’t know who you are.

Hopefully, that logic sticks when I finally record my metalcore/bro-country/rap song!

[JD01]

"Remember" in the first line is still a bit weird, but that's much better on the whole. Getting a bit more subtle now, but you should be able to hear what I'm getting at despite me having a terrible cold.

Recording.mp3

[vomitHatSteve]

Ah, I get what you're saying. I don't think I'll change that one tho because it drops a syllable from the musical rhythm, which is a choice I don't like in the first line of a song.
(Gotta save the changeups for at least the second stanza!)

[JD01]

Ah, I get what you're saying. I don't think I'll change that one tho because it drops a syllable from the musical rhythm, which is a choice I don't like in the first line of a song.
(Gotta save the changeups for at least the second stanza!)

No worries, that was just the only way I could explain what I was hearing.